The Unbojd Witch's Revolution: Challenging Traditional Witchcraft and Embracing a New Paradigm

The Unbound Witch is a concept that refers to a witch who defies societal norms and breaks free from the expectations and limitations placed upon her. This term is often used to describe a powerful and independent woman who does not conform to traditional gender roles and takes control of her own destiny. The Unbound Witch defies the image of a typical witch who is portrayed as old, ugly, and evil. Instead, she is depicted as a young, beautiful, and strong woman who embraces her own power and uses it for her own purposes. The Unbound Witch challenges the idea that women should be submissive and passive. She asserts her autonomy and asserts herself in a world that may seek to suppress her.

She asserts her autonomy and asserts herself in a world that may seek to suppress her. She does not seek validation or approval from others but creates her own path and follows her own beliefs. This concept of the Unbound Witch is often associated with themes of liberation, empowerment, and liberation.

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Overall, I feel that the greatest weakness here is that there are a lot of things that we're being told that I think you can tell us instead. Pg. 7 through 10 in particular felt like a lot of telling and not a lot of showing, so I'd try to cut some of that out. Other than that, the plotting's straightforward, the detail on your scenery is good, and you've got, I think, a pretty good grasp of metaphor. I didn't really see many parallels to Stormlight, other than the 'depressed dude becomes a god's champion' bit, which Sanderson definitely didn't invent. Notes below: Pg. 1: Flames poured out of windows—I wouldn't say 'poured', that implies they're falling. Maybe 'burst'? The voice called out again. —This whole paragraph is telling, not showing. It cast a dozen shadows onto the dirt. —I would recommend writing a snowflake simile here. A gasped and ran forward.—I would say that he dashed over to her. Someone else was approaching ahead and to his left.—I'd add some more detail to this. The person continued walking, seeming as if they hadn't seen him.—This sounds awkward. I'd change it to "The newcomer didn't see him and continued on." Pg. 3 He caused his bones to become denser—I'd change this to "He increased the density of his bones." He called out, hands flying. —I'd replace "He called out" with "He screamed" Kidneys are in the back, and it definitely seems like A's attacking from the front. The man recovered, however, easily sidestepping the blow.—This makes it sound like the blow made contact, but then he sidesteps it? So he was recovering from the pebble? Pg. 4 This fight wasn't over yet.—I'd rewrite this to prevent repetition, account of "Just like that, the fight was over." Pg. 7 To top it all off, when C had brought the others to pick up Y and himself, the pyro had been gone.—I'd rewrite this to, "To top it all off, the pyro was gone by the time Cead came back with help." Pg. 8 That wasn't the true story, from what they could tell.—They who? Which had worked.—I think you can delete this. We know they succeeded. Pg. 11 I'd take the bird sentence and combine it with the previous paragraph, but remove "There, he saw it." I think it would add a bit more of an abrupt punch and give us a better sense of A's sorrow. Pg. 14 Need to unbold M's dialogue attribution. "You will?"—This probably isn't what you're going for, mood-wise, but I think changing this to "Wait, really?" would be pretty funny.

The idea was to plop it on Amazon and let that be it. I'm not opposed to submitting it elsewhere, I'd just rather take the guaranteed, faster route of having my work out there. Sounds great, thanks!

I don't really have a solid timeline; I'd just like to finally have something published to my name. So if you could take a look at within the next month or two, Silk, I'd really appreciate that.

Hello. Would anyone be willing to take a look at the full manuscript for my current draft for The Witch and the Ostrich?

By and large, you're writing's pretty good. Straightforward, easy to visualize. Could maybe use a bit more flavor. Also, I'm trying to figure out how you pronounce some of the names. I didn't feel all that terribly invested in whatever was happening in this chapter, and like Mandamon, I'm having a hard time putting my finger on why. I think, in my case, it could be that there weren't many interesting character interactions going on. I was kind of interested in Y, but then she just leaves less than two full pages in. C feels like the kind of person who's deliberately trying to be eccentric and weird, and circles back around to being cringey. And there's not enough going on yet between A and R for met to feel a genuinely familial bond between them. But hey, we're only two chapters in. There's gonna be time and opportunity to stick in more detail. Notes below: Pg. 1: "So you think the army's gonna try crap tonight?"—Might be a bit modern, but I think "start sh*t" would sound better. "They already wore their flight harness over their clothes, since it was likely they would have gone scouting tonight anyway."—The tense here is kinda fudged. They 'already' wore a harness for something they'd apparently already done? "What about me, sir?" A said, also standing.—Already mentioned that he's standing up. Pg. 2: "You've got sharp eyes and you're probably one of the best plants I've ever seen."—She said she was going to cut the fat, but this feels like fat. Pg. 4 'The warehouse was now a bustling reef of activity, people, like schools of fish. " I think you can leave out the bolded left, since you already made the aquatic comparison. Grammatical note: It's incorrect to stick a hyphen after any word ending in 'ly' Pg. 6 "It's not TB again, is it?"—Since the backstory behind the whole coin tradition was explained, and this wasn't, it's pretty obvious that this is something you're trying to build a mystery over. That's not necessarily a bad thing, but it is obvious. Pg. 7 "It's not like I'm going to have a heart attack."—Calling it. Foreshadowing. Pg. 9 ". the wood scraping terribly against cement."—I feel that you could describe this in greater sensory detail. Pg. 11 "I love you, baba," he whispered.—I don't feel like the situation warrants a whisper. If he's running to save someone from a burning building, you'd think A would be more frantic and that would reflect on his voice.

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